[ti]Approved[/ti]Torprey

[neilk]

Torprey: The Awareness Pokemon

Ht: 3'06" Wt: 54.3 lbs
Type: Electric/Water
Origin: Cross between a southern stingray and a Florida Torpedo. 
Base Stats: 70/50/50/105/80/95
BST: 450 

Abilities: Static, Lightningrod HA: Volt Absorb


Level Up Moves:
Start: Thundershock
Start: Agility
Start: Poison Sting
Start: Mean Look
Lvl. 9: Sand-Attack
Lvl.12: Mud Sport
Lvl. 17: Spark
Lvl. 18: Charge
Lvl. 22: Flash
Lvl. 24: Bubblebeam
Lvl. 25: Discharge
Lvl. 27: Water Pulse
Lvl. 34: Thunderbolt
Lvl. 36: Dragon Tail
Lvl. 37: Thunder
Lvl. 41: Zap Cannon
Lvl. 48: Hydro Pump



by TM/HM:
TM06- Toxic
TM09- Venoshock
TM10- Hidden Power
TM12- Taunt
TM15- Hyper Beam
TM17- Protect
TM21- Frustration
TM24- Thunderbolt
TM27- Return
TM25- Thunder
TM32- Double Team
TM41- Torment
TM42- Facade
TM44- Rest
TM45-Attract
TM48-Round
TM55- Scald
TM57- Charge Beam
TM70- Flash
TM72- Volt Switch
TM73- Thunder Wave
TM75- Swords Dance
TM77- Psych Up
TM84- Poison Jab
TM88- Sleep Talk
TM90- Substitute
TM93- Wild Charge
TM94- Secret Power
TM96- Nature Power
TM100- Confide
HM03- Surf
HM07- Waterfall
HM08- Dive



By Tutor:
Aqua Tail
Mud Slap
Gastro Acid
Signal Beam
Snore
Earth Power





Egg Moves:
Shock Wave (Chinchou, Lanturn, Qwilfish)
Brine (Qwilfish, Wailmer, Wailord, Alomomola, Carvanha, Sharpedo)
Flail (Chinchou, Lanturn, Goldeen, Seaking, Magikarp, Gyarados, Basculin)
Supersonic (Goldeen, Seaking, Chinchou, Lanturn, Luvdisc)
Whirlpool (Wailmer, Wailord, Finneon, Lumineon)
Mud Shot ( Remoraid, Barboach, Relicanth)
Mud Slap ( Barboach, Whiscash)



Held Item: 25% Yellow Shard
Gender Ratio: 61% Male, 39% Female
Evolution: DNE (does not evolve)
Hatch Time: 6100 steps
EXP Yield: 92
Catch Rate: 80
Base Happiness: 70
EV Yield: 1 SATK, 1 SPEED
Body Type: Icthyic
Egg Group: Water 2

Design:
-Round, Flat Body.
-Spikes with coils for electric output.
-brightly colored as a natural defense. Main body is orange, with copper coils. 
-Circular cartilage is red ringed in pink/purple with purple tinted gills and nostrils, and an upturned nose. 
-circular part of the body is cartilaginous and undulates, allowing rapid movement.
- sharp spine on the end of the tail.
-battery-shaped forehead with half-moon eyes.

Art:

postimg.org/image/mruz00u93/

Cry:

clyp.it/qmkiys5b



Held Item: 25% Yellow Shard
Gender Ratio: 61% Male, 39% Female
Evolution: DNE (does not evolve)
Hatch Time: 6100 steps
EXP Yield: 92
Catch Rate: 80
Base Happiness: 70
EV Yield: 1 SATK, 1 SPEED
Body Type: Icthyic
Egg Group: Water 2



Dex Entry: This Pokemon rests on the seafloor. It raises its coils and spiky tail when threatened. It can disappear allegedly in the blink of an eye.

[neilk]

Galom im ready to have you check this one i think. I combed over it a few times now.

[The Run]

So from what I am seeing this Pokémon falls majority into SpA dominance. My suggestions is that you could remove Retaliate because what I saw from the picture, the pokemon does not have any arms, wings, etc. Unless you have a physical form to transform that with, I recommend you stick to mainly SpA instead of few attacks like Dig and Facade. Other than that, well done! Keep up the excellent work! 

[Galom]

510 BST is far too high for a non-evolving Pokemon. 470-480 is about the highest those get. You need Egg Moves as well as many other details that you are currently missing. Refine this further, not stamping yet.

[neilk]

i thought 510 might be a bit high, ive never done this before, so that helps a lot. I asked that question in room earlier and got 0 answers. ill work on egg moves and try to drop the bst to around 460 just to be under your ceiling a bit. You mentioned other details, what else would i need?

[neilk]

Galom made the edits. If you see anything else let me know.

[blackburn009]

The design looks a lot like stunfisk

[neilk]

stunfisk is a flounder though, and torprey is a stingray. and quite frankly if i wanted to make it stunfisk i woulda colored it that god-awful brown color. im not mad, jes sayin'.

[Snaquaza]

It doens't have all the needed Tutor moves, it seems like it learns a bit few egg moves. Flat Fish is not a bodytype. It seems fine otherwise.

[neilk]

Snaquaza made the edits.

[Hawkie]

Sounds pretty interesting, although it reminds me of a speedy Lanturn. I don't see how it could learn Poison Jab, with it having no arms. I'd suggest going through it's movepool and removing moves you couldn't imagine this Pokemon using. Otherwise it's a great idea, good luck.

[neilk]

umm... stingrays have poisonous tails?

[Snaquaza]

This seems good enough to get approved 1/2. However, an idea would be to give it some more "normal" moves in it's level-up, instead of all kinds of STAB moves. A move that seems really fitting is Mud Sport!

You may want a third ability too, but not necessary.

[neilk]

a third normal ability? i have static, lightningrod, and volt absorb is the HA. and as for the normal moves, most of the ones that are in Torprey's acceptable sphere of reasonableness are physical, and it is supposed to be a special attack based pokemon. Ill try and see if i can squeak another move or two in there though.

[Galom]

You've done very well here. The improvements are impressive, especially seeing as this is your first Pokemon. Approved 1/3, you really only need minor polishing.

[Ace]

I also like it, although you should make the post more presentable imo. I didn't know if all the miscellaneous information was there or not. Loving the art as well. Approved 2/3. There isn't much I can complain with, what's with the weird gender ratio though?

[The Run]

Although I can't approve this, it looks legitimate and well developed. Nice job.

[Snaquaza]

Approved 3/3

[rexthegamer]

Exp Yield: 158
Leveling pattern has no pattern.
Pretty sure Dragon Tail is only for lizard themed or dragon typed pokemon.
That gender ratio though.
Include a picture for body type.

"Held Item: 25% Yellow Shard

Gender Ratio: 61% Male, 39% Female

Evolution: DNE (does not evolve)

Hatch Time: 6100 steps

EXP Yield: 92

Catch Rate: 80

Base Happiness: 70

EV Yield: 1 SATK, 1 SPEED

Body Type: Icthyic

Egg Group: Water 2" Is repeated.



This is iffy:
Dex Entry: This Pokemon rests on the seafloor. It raises its coils and spiky tail when threatened. It can disappear allegedly in the blink of an eye.
Alternate entry: Torprey lies on the seafloor and when danger is close, it raises its coiled and spiked tail.  Allegedly, Torprey can vanish in the blink of an eye.

[NeilK30]

I'll redo this one and update it addressing the issues you guys mentioned.
This Mon had already been approved, can you guys double down on it if I make the changes?

[Devoxys]

Of course.