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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 30, 2016 13:25:34 GMT 1
One on left is Ventria, one on right is Empestria Ventria: The Spark Pokemon. Electric/Flying -type. 40 HP | 40 Atk | 40 Def | 80 SpA | 50 SpD | 95 Spe (345 BST) Abilities: Lighting Rod Evolves into Empestria at 28 Design: A yellow feathered parrot like Pokémon with wings that resemble an angel's wings (big and fluffy) and a little gem at the end of its tail that glimmers in day time. Shiny form is Blue. Physical Details: Height: 1.2m Weight: 20kg Egg Group: Flying Gender Ratio: 50% 50% Technical Details: Catch rate: 200 Hatch time: 4080-4334 steps. Base Happiness: 70 Base Exp Yield: 69 EV Yield: +1 Spe Leveling Rate: Fast Pokedex Color: Yellow Pokedex Shape: Alar Pokedex Entries: {OR}: A rare Pokemon that is said to produce large amounts of energy. The touch of its tail can power an entire household. {AS}: It is said that Ventria was created during a laboratory malfunction, which caused it to transform. Level-up Moves: Start: Peck Start: Gust Start: Screech lvl 4: Quick Attack lvl 8: Gust lvl 11: Charge lvl 15: Whirlwind lvl 18: Spark lvl 22: Wing attack lvl 25: Twister lvl 29: Thunder wave lvl 32: Coil lvl 36: Agility lvl 39: Air Slash TM and HM Moves: TM 06 Toxic TM 10 Hidden Power TM 16 Light Screen TM 19 Roost TM 21 Frustration TM 24 Thunderbolt TM 25 Thunder TM 27 Return TM 32 Double Team TM 40 Aerial Ace TM 42 Facade TM 44 Rest TM 45 Attract TM 48 Round TM 49 Echoed Voice TM 57 Charge Beam TM 58 Sky Drop TM 72 Volt Switch TM 87 Swagger TM 88 Sleep Talk TM 93 Wild Charge TM 94 Secret Power TM 100 Confide Egg Moves: Air cutter - Zubat. Golbat. Crobat. Noivern. Air slash- Pidgeot. Skarmory. Braviary. Swanna. Brave bird- Talonflame. Mandibuzz. Swellow. Staraptor. Swanna. Defog- Swanna. Pursuit- Honchkrow. Pelican. Wingull. Pelipper. Steel Wing- Fletchling. Fletchinder. Talonflame. Skarmory. Uproar- Doduo. Dodrio. Hoothoot. Noctowl. Whirlwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Starly Staravia Staraptor . Sigilyph. Rufflet Braviary. Noibat Noivern Tailwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Natu. Xatu. Murkrow. Honchkrow. Pellipper. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Sigilyph. Ducklett Swanna . Rufflet Braviary. Fletchling Fletchinder Talonflame. Noibat Noivern Feather Dance- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Chatot. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Ducklett. Swanna. Tutor Moves: Endure Sky attack Tailwind Snore Shock wave Iron tail (Considering it has a tail made of iron(Tesla coil)) Hyper voice Emprestria: the Energized Pokemon. Electric/Flying -type. 60 HP | 55 Atk | 55 Def | 105 SpA | 60 SpD | 119 Spe (454 BST) Abilities: Lightingrod Design: Design: A yellow feathered parrot like Pokémon with wings that resemble an angel's wings (big and fluffy) and a little gem at the end of its tail that glimmers in day time. Shiny form is Blue. Physical Details: Height: 3m Weight: 25kg Egg Group: Flying Gender Ratio: 50% 50% Technical Details: Catch rate: 50 Hatch time: 4080-4334 steps. Base Happiness: 70 Base Exp Yield: 159 EV Yield: +2 Spd Evs Leveling Rate: Fast Pokedex Color: Yellow Pokedex Shape: Alar Pokedex Entries: {OR}: Emprestria's tail produces large amounts of electricity when it is angered. It can cause great destruction if it becomes angry. {AS}: It charges its tail during storms, giving it the ability to take down entire buildings with one lightning strike. Level-up Moves: Start: Peck Start: Gust Start: Screech Start: Wing attack lvl 5: Quick attack lvl 10: Gust lvl 14: Charge lvl 19: Whirlwind lvl 23: Spark lvl 28: Discharge lvl 32: Twister lvl 37: Coil lvl 41: Agility lvl 46: Hurricane lvl 50: Ion Deluge lvl 55: Thunder lvl 59: Zap cannon TM and HM Moves: TM 06 Toxic TM 10 Hidden power TM 15 Hyper beam TM 16 Light screen TM 17 Protect TM 19 Roost TM 21 Frustration TM 24 Thunder bolt TM 25 Thunder TM 27 Return TM 32 Double team TM 40 Aerial Ace TM 41 Torment TM 42 Facade TM 44 Rest TM 45 Attract TM 48 Round TM 49 Echoed voice TM 51 Steel wing TM 57 Charge beam TM 58 Sky drop TM 72 Volt switch TM 87 Swagger TM 88 Sleep talk TM 93 Wild charge TM 94 Secret power TM100 Confide HM02 Fly Egg Moves: Air cutter - Zubat. Golbat. Crobat. Noivern. Air slash- Pidgeot. Skarmory. Braviary. Swanna. Brave bird- Talonflame. Mandibuzz. Swellow. Staraptor. Swanna. Defog- Swanna Pursuit- Honchkrow. Pelican. Wingull. Pelipper. Steel Wing- Fletchling. Fletchinder. Talonflame. Skarmory. Uproar- Doduo. Dodrio. Hoothoot. Noctowl. Whirlwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Starly Staravia Staraptor . Sigilyph. Rufflet Braviary. Noibat Noivern Tailwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Natu. Xatu. Murkrow. Honchkrow. Pellipper. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Sigilyph. Ducklett Swanna . Rufflet Braviary. Fletchling Fletchinder Talonflame. Noibat Noivern Feather Dance- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Chatot. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Ducklett. Swanna. Razor wind- Spearow Fearow. Pidove Tranquil Unfezant. Fletchling. Fletchinder. Talonflame. Noibat. Noivern. Cawmodore. Tutor Moves:Endure Sky attack Tailwind Snore Shock wave Iron tail (Considering it has a tail made of iron(Tesla coil)) Hyper voice Heat wave
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Post by Devoxys on Jan 30, 2016 15:34:14 GMT 1
Good start. There are still a couple of things you need to add. Check using this!The Species Name is too long. Just the "Energized Pokemon" is enough (especially because it doesn't resemble a parrot (imo) in the first place). 10008 steps is wayyyyyy too big. I suggest you go on Bulbapedia and copy the Hatch Time of a similar Pokemon. Oh, and the hatch steps should be the same for Pestria. There are specific body types, not just "parrot-like" or "turtle-like". You can find them if you scroll down on this page (you should read the whole article too!). Base Friendship should be 70. The lore is not something you would find in Pokemon. I suggest you just remove it. Base XP yield on Ventria should be 59 (BST*4/20) Base XP yield on Pestria should be 149 (BST*7/20) EV Yield on Ventria should be 1 SpA, and 2 SpA for Pestria Windslash is not a move. Air Slash is too powerful to be taught so early. Gender Ratio should be 50%/50% Length is not a valid detail. The level up move levels should follow a pattern. It could be like 3, 3, 3, 4, 4, 4, 5, 5, and so on or 3, 5, 3, 5, 3, 5. Another way to do it is to copy a similar Pokemon's level up move levels. List the TM Moves. There are a couple of "universal TMs", like Toxic or Protect.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 30, 2016 17:40:37 GMT 1
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Post by selfiehater on Jan 30, 2016 20:45:10 GMT 1
Kim BC , come take a look at this. Holy shit. I love the idea, and I love the names, but I love the amount of work put into this even more. No doubt you will get insta-approvals after you are finished. But no, you aren't finished yet. Almost there tho, this has developed much faster than most of the submissions here, including my own, so you don't even have to be as patient as most of the people here. Base Friendship should be 70.The level up move levels should follow a pattern. It could be like 3, 3, 3, 4, 4, 4, 5, 5, and so on or 3, 5, 3, 5, 3, 5. Another way to do it is to copy a similar Pokemon's level up move levels. List the TM Moves. There are a couple of "universal TMs", like Toxic or Protect. ^Just the parts that I want to emphasize in Devoxys's words. You can find the universal TMs here. However, please post the lore back. Not only I want to see it, but also it might contain crucial information to understand us how much work you put into this magnificent creation, which, in my (and some of the approvers') book, is blatantly equal to how much you deserve approvals. Why are these things so slow? 20 speed, why? "The Energized Pokémon", Electric typing, and Flying typing all have the speed flavor in it. It is kinda light too, especially Pestria, which is taller than Avalugg but is only 15 kg. Furthermore, these things are created from freaking ventuses, which are one of the fastest types of creatures in Roman mythology. In my opinion, this should be MUCH, MUCH, MUCH faster than it is right now. I have found the font editor of this forum insufficient in editing tools to properly emphasize the weirdness of this situation. And since you have only 295 (very low) and 425 (still kinda low) base-stat-totals respectively for each Fakémon here, you can put MUCH, MUCH, MUCH more base stat points into speed. To be completely honest, 115 base speed for the pre-evo is merely sufficient for this creation. Similarly, something between 115-120 is sufficient for Pestria. After doing this, you will have only 390 and 490-495 BSTs respectively, which is almost optimally high and completely manageable for a dual-evo creature. When I saw this thread, the names of Ventria and Pestria immidiately made me think these were Bug-types. I have a suggestion to avoid this inconvenience happening with other people, and that is to change the name of Pestria to Empestria. This is only a suggestion though; this is your Fakémon, and I'm not even an approver, so the last decision is naturally yours. Statria is also an option. Also, fix the horrible spacing of Pestria. Other than that, this creature is absolutely fascinating. However, the movepool is simply poorly developed, even after the fixes. First of all, excuse me? Bolt Strike? No. Remove that. I have absolutely no doubt that any approver will disagree with me here. Secondly, Acrobatics at level 10? No. Too powerful to be put so early. Why are both Brave Bird and Acrobatics learned before Drill Peck? It makes no sense. Wait a second, you have Fusion Bolt there too? It must not be there, and it is put after Bolt Strike? Absolutely remove both. I have absolutely no doubt that any approver will disagree with me here either. In addition to all these, both of the evolutions' level-up movepool are identical. You know what? In my opinion just contact Devoxys or Cyberknight98 , two very helpful and respected people in this project (are also two of the most active users here), and simply revise - no, recreate - the movepool within their guidance. /me sighs because he always fails on being not too harsh on people. Anyways, the second link Devoxys gave is broken, this is presumably what he meant: www.dragonflycave.com/makefake.aspxThat's it. Oh, and did I mention this thing is fascinating? n_n
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 30, 2016 21:56:39 GMT 1
selfiehater Thank you so much for the complements and the suggestions, i've took on board what you've said and i've tried my best with the moves but im not the best with making move pools up but i'm glad you like the concept! BTW im not good at art so do you know anyone that could actually turn this into a sprite? <3
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Post by selfiehater on Jan 30, 2016 22:59:55 GMT 1
/me sighs I said Speed, not Special Defense. And please do Ventria->Empestria. Pestria is the name to be confused with bugs, which makes it the one that should be removed. Other than that, always happy to help n_n PS: You think you aren't good at art? Pfft. The drawings are pretty decent to be honest. But if you still want help about it, go ask Salient . Edit: While 490 BST is manageable, 500 BST is too high.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 30, 2016 23:10:53 GMT 1
selfiehater I think i have managed to do everything, let me know if theirs anything i need to change, or any suggestions you have, 'm happy to change anything.
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Post by Cyberknight98 on Jan 30, 2016 23:16:37 GMT 1
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Post by Kim BC on Jan 30, 2016 23:22:11 GMT 1
Cool fakemon you've made. The design kind of gives me a dunsparce feel though. The EV Yield should be Speed, not Special Attack and I don't think Thunder Strike is a move. If you plan on submitting it as a move, explain that next to the move or hyperlink it to the page.The speed for the pre-evolution is too high considering the fastest is 100 so I suggest lowering it. I get a dragon-type feel from this since it looks like a reptile, especially because of the upper body design. I think it would be better dragon typing over flying but maybe that's just me, though some of the flying moves on this pokemon seem a bit odd. Speaking of moves, the movepool is way too small, expand the leveling up moves please. Once everything's finished, this'll make a great Pokemon.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 30, 2016 23:58:22 GMT 1
@kim BC I have tried my best to expand the level move pool, if theirs not enough can you suggest some moves i can put in? Im sort of struggling with moves
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Post by Kim BC on Jan 31, 2016 0:11:58 GMT 1
Spark, Wing Attack, Thunder Wave, Thunderbolt, Roost, Thunder, Coil, Agility, Wild Charge, etc. Put thm in the order you want+makes sense for the level up movepool and take out Frenzy Plant from move tutors, only grass starters get that. It's @ kimmybc by the way n.n
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Post by Salient on Jan 31, 2016 7:10:07 GMT 1
selfiehater, please do not tag me in a post that is not directly asking me something. Let the person you are referring to me contact me on their own. This is missing a lot of things. It should still learn moves even after the level it evolves at. Pressing "B" to prevent evolution is possible. You're using the wrong TM list. Use Serebii's Omega Ruby TM list to get the correct ones. Empestria looks very similar to Ventria. That's all for now, once you fix those I can probably start on the Pokemon.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 12:45:35 GMT 1
Salient Reworked my design and the moves, i hope its okay let me know if you have any ideas or suggestions to change, im open minded
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 18:49:27 GMT 1
Kim BC selfiehater What do you think of the second evolutions design? And do you think im finished? <3
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Post by selfiehater on Jan 31, 2016 18:56:58 GMT 1
Repost the shiny design. Then I'll look at it when I have time.
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Post by Kim BC on Jan 31, 2016 19:01:12 GMT 1
I think one of the designs need changing as they both seem very similar, all that was changed was the object at the end of its tail and body position. Changing the color scheme and head would work.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 19:23:11 GMT 1
@kimmyb Do you think the new design is any better? <3
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Post by selfiehater on Jan 31, 2016 19:24:48 GMT 1
Looks much better.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 19:29:04 GMT 1
selfiehater Thats good, so do you think im finished now? Or can you see any more tweaks you can think of, A new set of eyes are really helping me with this project <3
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Post by Kim BC on Jan 31, 2016 19:39:56 GMT 1
Wow I really like the new design! You still need to put the entire TM list of moves it learns like everyone has been saying, put the full level up movepool for both pokemon (from start to end, look at other Fakemon posts if you still need help), get rid of the moves that aren't real like thunder tail, andput the breeding parentsfor the egg moves (like what pokemon can Pestria breed woth Iin it's egg group to get that particular move through breeding. You can type the egg group and the move in to PS' s Teambuilder to use the search engine to get the breeding parents. Once you finish everything, you can change the post tag to "Quality Control" and tag council members for quality checks, or QCs.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 20:51:03 GMT 1
Kim BC Better? Or am i still missing something?<3
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Post by Kim BC on Jan 31, 2016 22:05:01 GMT 1
Still missing moves for TMs and Tutor like rest, sleep talk, snore, etc. Some of the egg move parents like ampharos and plusle aren't in the flying egg group so they're not valid parents. The level up movepool for the first evolution should end sometime around level 40-50 and 50-60 for the second evolution. Also remove the signature legendary moves like oblivion wing and bolt strike.
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Post by selfiehater on Jan 31, 2016 22:20:21 GMT 1
Unfezant doesn't even get Brave Bird. Stop giving this thing signature moves (Aeroblast). I don't see how Coil makes sense tbh, but keep it if you want to. Add something before level 20 for Empestria.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 22:22:33 GMT 1
Kim BC I'm sorry for keep tagging you in this but i want to make this a good fakemon for the game, it's also my first fakemon for a game so the move pool was kinda difficult for me to do but im sure ill get the hang of it. Ive added more tms like rest and substitute and some others. Is there any more i need to add/ <3
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Post by Kim BC on Jan 31, 2016 22:33:21 GMT 1
Don't worry about it, i'm glad to help xD. Take out Aeroblast on the first evolution,that's signature to Lugia. The second evolution has to have moves before level twenty for the level up. Make sure all the parents for the egg moves are correct because I'm pretty sure Unfezant doesn't learn Brave Bird. The tutor moves are still missing things like snore and I don't believe rest and sleep talk are move tutor moves.
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