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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 22:54:17 GMT 1
Kim BC selfiehater Okay i removed the signature moves (Sorry didn't realize they were in fact signature moves my bad) I added more tutor moves. i added more tms, I double checked the egg groups and egg moves, i removed emolga cause its not a flying egg group. Hope fully thats it, if not, im sorry. Can you see anything else wrong?
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Post by Kim BC on Jan 31, 2016 23:16:43 GMT 1
Relic Song and Dragon Ascent are signature to Meloetta and Mega Rayquaza so remove those, also the second evolution still needs level up mobes before level 18.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 23:22:57 GMT 1
Kim BC I've removed relic song and dragon ascent, and added some moves 17/18/20/23 but i cant add any before level 17 because he evolves at that point unless im missing something completely obvious?
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Post by Kim BC on Jan 31, 2016 23:36:35 GMT 1
Take out nuzzle, that's exclusive to the Pikachu clones (pachirisu, dedenne, etc). Evolutions still need to have mobes before evolving because if you try to heart scale a move, the moves it learned before evolving would still be there. Having no moves like you do now would give this Pokemon no moves to possibly heart scale back.
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Post by rexthegamer on Jan 31, 2016 23:57:59 GMT 1
Kim BC There i think i fixed it? Maybe? Let me know if ive messed up again XD Thanks alot for the help though ive needed it XD <3
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Post by Kim BC on Feb 1, 2016 0:05:10 GMT 1
Change the level 2 moves to level 3 on Pestria and I think everything's all good after that.
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 1, 2016 0:10:56 GMT 1
Kim BC i did that so unless anyone else finds anything im pretty much sorted right? Thank you so much for the help! Youve been amazing in helping me! If you need any help just ask me ill be on every day but id doubt youll need me XD Thank you <3
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 1, 2016 12:49:48 GMT 1
Devoxys finished! I think so If I am then can you please approve it but if you think I should change something just tell me to do it <3
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Post by Salient on Feb 1, 2016 20:54:00 GMT 1
I think you should have different abilities on this Pokemon. Maybe Lightningrod could work, as well as Early Bird. The increments of its level-up moves are a bit sporadic as well. I also don't understand why it gets Sandstorm and Coil. Pre-evolutions usually don't get Hyper Beam. It should also learn moves like Discharge and stuff. Please put the TMs in order by their number. Once you fix all of that, I'll comment on Empestria.
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Post by Devoxys on Feb 1, 2016 22:04:19 GMT 1
Hatch Time is wrong. Copy an existing Pokemon's hatch time (use Bulbapedia).
Level-up move levels are random. They usually follow some sort of pattern, like 3, 5, 3, 5... or 3, 3, 3, 3, 5, 5.... Your best bet is to copy a similar Pokemon's level-up move levels.
Now that you increased the BST, the Base EXP Yield for Ventria is 69 and 159 for Empestria.
You need more TM Moves and Egg Moves.
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 1, 2016 22:37:06 GMT 1
Devoxys i added more egg moves more tms and i changed the leveling up moves and the hatch time and i have changed the base exp yield points. If ive missed anything i am so sorry i am bad at doing this, its my first time making a detailed fakemon but next time ill make sure i have done everything correct <3
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 2, 2016 21:37:36 GMT 1
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Post by Devoxys on Feb 2, 2016 21:52:57 GMT 1
Why does this get: Sandstorm, Snatch, Bind
Needs more Egg Parents. Go find a Pokemon on Bulbapedia with the same egg group and copy the egg parents of its egg moves.
Empestria should have a range for the hatch time I'm not 100% sure that the hatch time is valid (its a multiple of a number, forgot what it was), so go check again.
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 2, 2016 23:00:03 GMT 1
Devoxys Im sorry if im annoying you when im constantly tagging you in this, but i have copied swellows hatch time as he has a similar friendship as Pestria and therefore the calculation should be the same if i am correct, if not again i am sorry, i removed sandstorm and snatch and bind, and i added more egg move parents
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Post by Devoxys on Feb 3, 2016 13:33:48 GMT 1
If you are using Swellow, then it should be 4080-4334 steps.
Write every egg parent there can be. Instead of "Talonflame, Mandibuzz, etc." or "Talonflame line, Mandibuzz line", etc.", write "Fletchling, Fletchinder, Talonflame, Vullaby, Mandibuzz...and so on"
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 3, 2016 17:17:30 GMT 1
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Post by Devoxys on Feb 3, 2016 21:37:15 GMT 1
Please stop tagging me at over 9000 tags per minute, you are not the only submission here. Don't worry too much, I try to check every new post, so just a bump is usually sufficient.
Anyway, I'm gonna wait until someone else (doesn't have to be roomstaff) looks at this because I'm the only one looking at this that consistently and I want to see if anyone else has more feedback.
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 3, 2016 22:06:45 GMT 1
Ah ok i'm so sorry for annoying you, my bad, anyways thank you so much for helping me though.
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Post by selfiehater on Feb 4, 2016 0:14:52 GMT 1
I'll try to do this in classic GP style. This is (mostly) just a grammar check since some things were kinda irritating me. Also somewhat fixed the egg parents. Remove Add Comment Small Change (Capitalization, wrong spelling etc.)Basic details
Name: Ventria (Ventus = Wind in Latin and Industria =Energy/electricity.) Species: The Energized Pokemon Type: Flying/Electric Ability: Lighting RodLightningrodLightning (remove space)rod forces all single-target Electric-type moves used by foes to strike the Pokémon with this Ability. Electric-type moves used by foes will never miss the Pokémon with this Ability. Height: 1.2m Weight: 20kg Hatch time: 4080-4334 steps. Poke entry: A magnificant yellow bird that is said to bring great energy to power plants. The touch of its tail can power an entire household. Its is said to be born from a bird that was electrified in a lab evolving into this. Ventria evolves into Empestria at level 17(This is simply too low for such a powerful thing to evolve at. Please put this to something around level 29.) Found in mountains or near electrical plants. Design: A yellow feathered parrot like Pok émon with wings of an that resemble an angel 's wings type ( big and fluffy) and a little gem at the end of its tail that glimmers in day time. Shiny form is Blue .Base Friendship: 70 Footprint:None Body Type: Alar Egg group: Flying Gender Ratio: 50% Male 50% Female. Catch Rate: 200 Pokedex Colour: Yellow Base XP yield: 69 Ev yield: +1 Sp e (Please always refer the speed stat as Spe.) HP: 40 Atk: 40 Def: 40 SpA: 80 SpD: 50 Spd: 95
Moves by level Start: Peck Start: Gust Start: Screech lvl 7: Quick Attack lvl 10: Charge lvl 17: Double Team lvl 14: Whirlwind lvl 20: Spark lvl 27: Wing Attack lvl 34: Thunder Wave lvl 40: Thunder (remove space)bolt lvl 47: Roost lvl 54: Agility lvl 56: Air Slash Tm
TM 06 Toxic TM 10 Hidden Power TM 16 Light Screen TM 19 Roost TM 21 Frustration TM 24 Thunder (remove space)bolt TM 25 Thunder TM 27 Return TM 32 Double Team TM 40 Aerial Ace TM 42 Facade TM 44 Rest TM 45 Attract TM 48 Round TM 49 Echoed Voice TM 57 Charge Beam TM 58 Sky Drop TM 72 Volt Switch TM 87 Swagger TM 88 Sleep Talk TM 93 Wild Charge TM 94 Secret Power Egg moves:
Air cutter - Zubat. Golbat. Crobat. Noivern. Air slash- Pidgeot. Skarmory. Braviary. Swanna. Brave bird- Talonflame. Mandibuzz. Swellow. Staraptor. Swanna .Defog- Swanna. Haze- Murkrow. Honch krow. Golbat. Pursuit- Honch krow. Pelican. Wingull. Pelipper.Rage- Doduo. Dodrio. Taillow. Swellow. Altaria. Steel (add space) Wing- Fletchling. Fletchinder. Talonflame. Skarmory .Gust- Pidgey . Pidgeotto . Pidgeot. Pidove . Tranquill . Unfezant. Noibat . Noivern. Sky attack- Altaria. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant . Hoot (remove space)hoot. Noctowl. Togetic. Togekiss. Sigilyph Uproar- Doduo. Dodrio. Hoot (remove space)hoot. Noctowl.Curse- Farfetch'd Drill Peck- Spearow Fearow. Doduo Dodrio. Whirlwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Starly Staravia Staraptor Line. Sigilyph. Rufflet Braviary. Noibat Noivern. Outrage- Swablu Altaria. Archeops. Tailwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Natu. Xatu. Murkrow. Honchkrow. Pel lipper. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Sigilyph. Ducklet t Swanna . Rufflet Braviary. Fletchling Fletchinder Talonflame. Noibat Noivern Feather Dance- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Chatot. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Ducklet t. Swanna. HmHM 02 Fly Tutor:Endure Sky attack Tailwind Snore Bind Shock wave Iron tail (Considering it has a tail made of iron(Tesla coil)) To be honest it would get the move even if it didn't resemble a Tesla Coil. If this is the case though, re-add Coil to the level-up movepool.Hyper voice
Name: Empestria (Empowered + Pestria) (Tempestatum=storm/weather in Latin and Industria=Energy/Electricity) Ditto from here.Species: The Energized Pokemon Type: Flying/Electric Ability: Lighting Rod Lightning rod forces all single-target Electric-type moves used by foes to strike the Pokémon with this Ability. Electric-type moves used by foes will never miss the Pokémon with this Ability. Height: 3m Weight: 25kg Hatch time: 4080-4334 steps.Poke entry: Pestria is the second evolution and its tail can bring great destruction. It can be charged in storms and has the power to destroy entire structures with a few bolts of lighting. Design: A yellow feathered parrot like pokemon with wings of an angel type (Big and fluffy) And a Tesla ball at the end of its tail that shoots bolts of lighting that can destroy houses. It is purple in shiny form. Base Friendship: 70 Footprint:None Body Type: Alar Egg group: Flying Gender Ratio: 50% Male 50% Female. Catch Rate: 50 Pokedex Colour: Yellow Base XP yield: 159 Ev yield: +2 Spd EV HP: 70 Atk: 50 Def: 55 SpA: 105 SpD: 60 Spd: 115Moves learned by level-up:
lvl 1: Peck lvl 1: Gust lvl 3: Screech lvl 7: Quick attack lvl 10: Charge lvl 13: Whirlwind lvl 17: Agility lvl 20: Discharge lvl 23: Quick attack lvl 27: Spark lvl 30: Wing attack lvl 33: Thunder wave lvl 47: Thunder bolt lvl 50: Roost lvl 53: Wild charge lvl 57: Thunder lvl 63: Hyper Beam
TmTM 10 Hidden power TM 15 Hyper beam TM 16 Light screen TM 17 Protect TM 19 Roost TM 21 Frustration TM 24 Thunder bolt TM 25 Thunder TM 27 Return TM 32 Double team TM 40 Aerial Ace TM 41 Torment TM 42 Facade TM 44 Rest TM 45 Attract TM 48 Round TM 49 Echoed voice TM 51 Steel wing TM 57 Charge beam TM 58 Sky drop TM 72 Volt switch TM 87 Swagger TM 88 Sleep talk TM 93 Wild charge TM 94 Secret power Tutor: Endure Sky attack TailwindSnore Shock wave Iron tail (Considering it has a tail made of iron(Tesla coil)) Hyper voice Electro web Egg moves: Air cutter - Zubat. Golbat. Crobat. Noivern. Air slash- Pidgeot. Skarmory. Braviary. Swanna. Brave bird- Talonflame. Mandibuzz. Swellow. Staraptor. Swanna Defog- Swanna. Haze- Honchcrow. Golbat. Pursuit- Honchcrow. Pelican. Rage- Dodrio. Swellow. Altaria. Steelwing- Talonflame. Skarmory Gust- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Noibat Noivern. Sky attack- Altaria. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant . Hoot Hoot. Togekiss. Sigilyph Uproar- Dodrio. Hoot hoot. Curse- Farfetch'd Drill Peck- Spearow Fearow. Doduo Dodrio. Whirlwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Starly Staravia Staraptor Line. Sigilyph. Rufflet Braviary. Noibat Noivern. Outrage- Swablu Altaria. Archeops. Tailwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Xatu. Murkrow. Pellipper. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Sigilyph. Ducklet Swanna . Rufflet Braviary. Fletchling Fletchinder Talonflame. Noibat Noivern Feather dance- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Chatot. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Ducklet Swanna.
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Lore: Pestria was said to be born from a parrot being experimented on in a lab, but one day zapdos was angered and terrorized the power plant, shooting bolts of lighting everywhere. This corrupted and malfunctioned the computers and wires connecting to the bird. And suddenly, with a great beam of light, Pestria was born. When Pestria evolves into Empestria, its tesla gem would become more powerful, it is said it can destroy a single building with one blast, however Empestria is a passive pokemon and doesn't choose to use its power for evil, Unless an evil team harnesses its power (Hint hint plot) However it takes a whole day for it to harness the suns power in its tesla gem.
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Post by selfiehater on Feb 4, 2016 0:15:23 GMT 1
I don't have time rn, I'll make a much more detailed control later. It's missing some of the universal TMs. What do you think, Devoxys?
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 4, 2016 0:33:44 GMT 1
Jesus. Thank you so much for doing that. Is there anything I can do to repay you in anyways :3
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Post by Salient on Feb 4, 2016 3:06:25 GMT 1
It has quite a few moves that don't make sense or that I think it shouldn't learn. Such as: Brave bird- Talonflame. Mandibuzz. Swellow. Staraptor. Swanna. Defog- Swanna. Haze- Murkrow. Honchkrow. Golbat. Rage- Doduo. Dodrio. Taillow. Swellow. Altaria. Steel(add space) Wing- Fletchling. Fletchinder. Talonflame. Skarmory. Gust- Pidgey. Pidgeotto. Pidgeot. Pidove. Tranquill. Unfezant. Noibat. Noivern. (I don't think this should be an egg move, rather just by level up) Sky attack- Altaria. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant . Hoot(remove space)hoot. Noctowl. Togetic. Togekiss. Sigilyph (perhaps as a tutor move, may be wrong) Uproar- Doduo. Dodrio. Hoot(remove space)hoot. Noctowl. Curse- Farfetch'd Drill Peck- Spearow Fearow. Doduo Dodrio. Tailwind- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Natu. Xatu. Murkrow. Honchkrow. Pellipper. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Sigilyph. Ducklett Swanna . Rufflet Braviary. Fletchling Fletchinder Talonflame. Noibat Noivern Feather Dance- Pidgey Pidgeotto Pidgeot. Chatot. Pidove Tranquill Unfezant. Ducklett. Swanna.
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 4, 2016 19:40:31 GMT 1
Well it is a flying type pokemon, it does have wings as well, I think they are suitable, unless anyone else thinks i should remove all them moves then i shall but i think they are okay <3
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Post by rexthegamer on Feb 8, 2016 19:59:49 GMT 1
Devoxys Are you able to approve this pokemon or do you still need more people to view it? Thanks - Rex
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Post by Devoxys on Feb 8, 2016 21:17:08 GMT 1
Hmm, I'm not too sure what @salient meant in his last post on this thread, so I'l wait for him.
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